Write on

When I read my 1st draft, I feel that I was able to utilize juxtaposition effectively. However I feel that it lacked "aboutness"; I found myself asking, what is this ABOUT? In future pieces I want to know, not just what I'm writing about, but also the point I'm trying to convey to the reader.

I want to keep developing my spacing and grouping techniques, because I feel like that aspect of the essay helps with the pace that the reader digests the information and how they interpret the story. As far as content is concerned, I want to explore things that are more far reaching and relavent to a larger audience than what I've been tinkering with.